The Friday Fictioneer Challenge: Write a 100-word story based on the photo prompt.
A week after his father died, Lou locked the shop for the last time. When they buried his father, they buried Lou’s plans to join his father’s business after graduation.
Ten years later, on the anniversary of his father’s death, Lou stood in front of the shop, remembering his shattered dreams. He said goodbye to the life he had planned as a teenager. He looked at his watch, a Gucci limited edition, as his limo pulled up behind him. Life, he learned, rarely offered only one possibility. Lou had kept dreaming. His smile was bittersweet as he entered the limo.
Your second sentence of your first paragraph is confusing. I don’t think you want people to have to go ‘I think I know what he means here’. The story is too good for me to not mention this. It’s a distraction/detraction from a good piece.
I’ll take another look. Thanks
I have to wonder what path Lou chose that paid off so well in ten years. Apparently his dreams weren’t too badly shattered. Nicely done.
Nicely done.. Of course, it goes both ways. Interesting to know what would have happened the other way around…
Absolutely true. In the same vein that life rarely offers one path, life also does not guarantee to comply with one’s plans. So the past that didn’t happen, that Lou said goodbye to, wouldn’t have been exactly as he imagined it.
That’s really sad. The Gucci and the limo don’t make up for what he really wanted.
True. The death of Lou’s father put him on the path to where he ended up, but it never is worth Lou’s loss of his father.